ext_189251 ([identity profile] random-glitch.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] create_serenity 2007-08-29 05:28 pm (UTC)

I liked this. I have to admit that I did not read the first part, but I got the gist, and this...definitely leaves me waiting for the third installment. *grins*

Only one thing, if you don't mind me saying so. The kiss deepened and Harry felt his legs going weak at the knees. reads a bit oddly to me. I think it is the use of legs/knees together.

Great story, and I will be looking forward to the conclusion!

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